Thursday, 8 August 2013

The Lion And The Mouse

This week my literacy teacher Mr Marks has been teaching us how to add detail to some of the sentences from the story the lion and the mouse. We are really enjoying it. We also learnt how to tell people that it was day time without saying it was day time. Here are some of the sentences that we have been editing. The red text is what we add.  As the sun was setting the mouse gnawed the rope with his teeth. Here is a link to a short version of the story The Lion And The Mouse.


  1. Good writing jordan..keep it up

    1. Thanks mum for your little comment.